Dark Sploosh

Chapter 2: Hair “I want it long, straight, curly, fuzzy, snaggy, shaggy, ratty, matty, oily, greasy, fleecy, shining, gleaming, streaming, flaxen, waxen, knotted, polka-dotted, twisted, beaded, brai

Hey. There were a bunch of formatting and punctuation errors which other people will tell you about, so I'll just talk about the plot. It's very refreshing to read something ...

You're a hell of a better writer than I was when I was your age. For criticisms, some of the descriptions got too laced with adjectives, and I get this ...

This is a very experimental work of mine, so I'm expecting lots of reviews that criticize the narrative structure or any conventions I happen to accidentally break. All two of ...

I was impressed with how much you break the fourth wall in the beginning, likely because I'm experimenting with something similar at the moment. That said, I can't help but ...

Umm, no idea...female, short, reddish brown hair in a ponytail? And freckles.

Name: Jay Age: 19 Fav book: On Writing, by Stephen King Fav author: J.K. Rowling Fav food: Don't have one specifically Fav store: Gamestop, I guess Fav hobby: Video games ...

Flips back and forth between anime and a live action film. Usually depends on the mood, but often I'll visualize it both ways in the same story. I'd say seeing ...

Always worried that I'm not being descriptive enough. Reading "On Writing" and the various criticisms leveled at Twilight and the Inheritance Cycle really lead one to accidentally underwrite sometimes

There's a ton of anime I like, but really the only one I feel like mentioning now is Code Geass. How can I describe this show in a way that ...

King of Babylon Dark Sploosh Chapter 5: The Road to Chicago I was awoken by someone poking me in the forehead. Well, not really. Actually, I woke up with my ...

As I seem to always have to say at the beginning of my reviews, there were a lot of grammar errors, shift tenses, and other such problems that I won't ...

Oh sweet, two new stickers. Those are going right into my collection, bringing the total to a whopping two! Feels good, man.

Hello. I don't normally read romance fiction, often because I find it's too grounded in reality, which I often find boring. That being the case, this may not be the ...

Oh my. A Circlevillian on YWS? I never would have guessed it. Well, a fellow Pickaway County writer says hi!